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Beck's Guard by ~Lawren:iconLawren:



“...and the disruptors?”
Teige looked up from where he kneeled at the councils feet, rubbing his left eye with the palm of his hand had become almost a nervous tick, and he did it again now. Chain mail rattled loosely over his scarred wrist and seeing the twisted flesh exposed several members of the council looked away, expressions of disgust twisting plainly on their faces. Tiege smiled silently to himself, the crows feet just forming at the corners of his blue eyes crinkling anew. After a second the sparkle faded. His look turned grim. The disruptors, the disruptors, the disruptors, didn’t they understand it wasn’t as simple as just walking into an empty storehouse and prying the lid off a few crates. The disruptors were protected, guarded. Systems far better, and far older than the standard two guards to a door routine had been assigned to the ancient ruins which held the weapons. Already two teams had been sent, two of his best teams, led by men he had picked personally. Strong, smart, battle hardened men. Neither yet to return.
“They are en route as we speak chancellor.”
“En route. . . your sure?” The chancellor, his majesty Roswald Farrier Denner, spoiled brat, chauvinist, coward,  asked in his deep booming voice. For a second hidden speakers squealed as his voice was amplified time and again to reach the people at the backmost portions of the huge amphitheater. Everyone winced, more than a few raised hands to their ears, pained expressions stamped clearly on their faces, but then he reached forward and adjusted the narrow metal cylinder that waited on the worn surface of the table before him. Moments passed and at last the room died to silence as they waited for Sgt. Tiege’s reply. For many this was akin to watching the images of the ancient motion box, a contraption as mysterious as the thin metal housing that waited at the three of the council members lips. The last of the motion boxes had died three years before, no one had heard of another since.
“Positive Maitre Chancellor.  As a matter of fact, I leave tonight to meet with the transports and see of their safe return myself.”
“See that you do.” With a wave of his ruby studded wrist Roswald signaled that Teige should dismiss himself. The other wholeheartedly agreed. The council chambers were huge, but cramped, sweaty, and bureaucratic. He hated the dealings of the government. He was a warrior, the whining and sometimes brash, childish arguments between members sent a sharp stab of pain through his head on the rare occasions he was forced to address the council. They were a bunch of weasels. Spoiled, high society brats who had inherited their positions from their fathers. The days of a voted governments were passed. The council had become too powerful, the Chancellor himself more of a king than a peoples ruler. The councils word was Law. Only surpassed by the voice of the Chancellor himself.
Teige brushed the thoughts aside, rose to his feet and strode through the narrow isle that opened before him. The government rulings were none of his business. He was a soldier. His job was to protect the people. Not to question those that ruled them. Even the Chancellor himself had no rule over the Guard. No final say at least, he amended. As long as their ways were in agreement the Guard had no problem following orders. If someone stepped over the line though, that invisible thread between benevolent ruler and malevolent dictator, it was their job to cast them down. To cast them out. No laws had been amended as of yet to turn the Guard from a servant of the people, to their jailors. Tiege silently thanked that. Even in these hard times most still had a sense of honor. If things ever came to that, he was afraid he would become a deserter. A turncoat. He would leave. There were lands west. Lands were people still lived by the gun. Where a quick wrist was needed.
In the hall beyond he halted, leaning heavily into the eroded stone of the wall. Cold sweat broke over his body and he shuddered with chills. From a pocket he removed a thin red capsule and slid it between tight pressed lips. The skin of his cheeks were draining of color, his palms damp and clammy as he swallowed. He gripped his shivering body and willed it to be at peace, begged it, when that didn’t work, commanded it. After a moment is was so.
Behind him the Chancellors voice rang over the smooth marble walls. Calling out to the people for silence. Ordering the other members to be at peace. Over the roar of the crowd he could hear a heated argument breaking between Calem Werts, the seer of public funds, and Bauer Blue, commander of the Blue Guard, the most highly trained regiment of soldiers in Camain.
Teige pushed himself loose from the wall, feeling worn stone give release of him almost reluctantly. Myre and Jolin had already left, the remainder of Bleck’s Guard would be waiting with fresh horses. They would leave tonight, as he had promised the Chancellor, but not to meet up with the returning transports. They left to find them, and the disruptors. The disruptors above all else. The codes and blueprints were ready, prepared copies of the originals hidden in a vault deep beneath the council chambers. The same copies that had accompanied the two previous teams.
Slick white marble sped past his footfalls as they became more hurried, as his strength returned. The Guard would be waiting, the horses still fresh, a warriors quest awaited them. And beyond that, the legend that was the disruptors. Too bad no one remembered what they were.
©2005-2009 ~Lawren
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Author's Comments

This is a story I'm devloping just to post here on deviant art. It's based in a post apocolyptic setting. The reign of mankind and machine has ended. Civilization has started itself anew. Whether there will be magic or not in this I am as yet unsure, but they will find bits and pieces of the past left behind. Teige Beck is the main character, he is the commander of Beck's Guard. A garrison of soldiers in the city of Camain. The story doens't take place there, it just starts its' journey in the council chambers, and then the barracks. Check it out, you never know, it might draw your attention.

This is the rough draft, no editing has been done, so don't be surprised if you find some bad grammar, or missing words. I skip sometimes, my mind travels faster than my fingers.

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:iconforestshimmer:
Very nice!
Post Appocalyptic is always fun, so many directions to go.

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....I got it from a very reliable source, a hedgehog named Toad....
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"So, where will you be when the Mother Ship lands?"
:iconlawren:
Thanks, and your right, there are so many different ways to go. Sci-fi, fantasy, history, western, I think those are a few. I'm guessing this is going to lean more toward sci-fi fantasy. Basically it takes place in a world where mankind has fallen, and i know in the ruins ahead, which is probably a u.s. military base, they will have to deal with some of that lost technology.

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"Paranoia is the mother of invention." Anita Blake 'The Executioner'

Happiness is like peeing your pants. Everyone can see it but only you can feel the warmth
:iconforestshimmer:
*rubs hands together*
Coolness.

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....I got it from a very reliable source, a hedgehog named Toad....
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"So, where will you be when the Mother Ship lands?"
:iconlawren:
Yeah, that's pretty much what I did when i started all this. "All right, lets get down to business.!" Second part might go up tonight, or tomorrow.

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"Paranoia is the mother of invention." Anita Blake 'The Executioner'

Happiness is like peeing your pants. Everyone can see it but only you can feel the warmth
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oooo intense.. as before I love the descriptive detail especially Sgt. Tiege's opinion of the Chancellor and the council in general. heheh.. this story leaves me curious as to what that little red capsule was ? surely not just a red panadol :XD:

good job :D and a very damn good job for a rough draft :clap:

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Red panadol? What is that? You know, I'm not even sure what the little red pill is yet (I probably shouldn't be saying that), but I know it will come up later because it seemed important that i add that to the story. It's a sickness, that's all I know right now. In the coming chapter we learn that his grandfather died of a sickness. This might be it, but I'm not sure. Thanks for the favorite, and I'm actually enjoying writing this, I didn't think I would, but I've been kind of blocked up on The Clearing, that's the one that Homeward came from. Anyway, I might post more on this either tonight, or tomorrow, I'm thinking more like tomorrow cause I'd kind of like to go back over this second half.

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"Paranoia is the mother of invention." Anita Blake 'The Executioner'

Happiness is like peeing your pants. Everyone can see it but only you can feel the warmth
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This piece was very well-written, with excellent, in-depth descriptions that don't distract the reader from the story itself. It was short, which is nice, and it portrays an interesting setting. When I started reading, I was struck by the similarities between your setting and "Rifts", a role-playing game that's easily converted to a novel/shorts setting-- maybe it's just that they're both post-Apocalyptic. :shrug: Me no kno.

There were a few problems I noticed in grammar, probably just a lack of editing-- I'm not sure if you want me to point them out or not, so I won't. Also, the format isn't the best-- there is little distinction between paragraphs. I know that Word often formats paragraphs, but when you put a Word document up on dA the formatting is gone. Of course, it is optional, but I suggest you use some way to distinguish one paragraph from another-- either by putting five spaces before the first word in the new paragraph (still not the best Internet form, but better than nothing) or by skipping a line. Again, it's at your own preference.

I really enjoyed this, and frankly it kinda inspired me to start thinking about a "post-Apocalyptic" story of my own. :D good job.
:iconlawren:
Hey thanks. I used WordPerfect for this, do you know of a program that will allow me to keep my format when i post here to deviant art? I've got Microsoft Word on my computer, but never use it. Or is that the word you were talking about. On this same subject, I beleive I have made that exact same suggestion to others here on DeviantArt.

You can point out whatever gramma mistakes I make, I run this through spellcheck as I type, and usually proofread, but I still do miss things. Any help is appreciated and accepted.

As for "Rifts" I've never heard of it. If it's online, that's why. My computer is slower than....well....a rock..... that can only travel by night, and then only when the moon in full eclipse. If you get my drift.

I thought I was going to be posting the next part tonight, but it's turning out a little longer than planned. So, It still might, but it's looking more like tomorrow.

I'm glad I inspired someone, I just started this because i used it as an example while critiquing someone else's work, and it turned out quite well. It's actually my first attempt at this kind of thing, so we'll see how things go.

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"Paranoia is the mother of invention." Anita Blake 'The Executioner'

Happiness is like peeing your pants. Everyone can see it but only you can feel the warmth
:iconsynthwrr:
Yeah, I was talking about Microsoft Word. I don't think there's any program that allows that, unless you manually format it (just with spaces, no "tab"). I usually format on Word seperately, then drop it on dA and format it again. Hey, it works.. check out [link] for a heavily-formatted story, if you're interested.

"Rifts" doesn't have a very large audience, I'm not surprised that you've never heard of it. It's a roleplaying game, something I just picked up at a used book store. :shrug: I dunno.

I know how it goes with starting a story as an example, although I haven't really continued the story I started as an example. Yet. =P

As for the second part, I'd love to read it-- could you send a note when you've posted it up, since I might forget?

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